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The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.
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THE FLOWCHART ILLUSTRATES
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THE THR
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THR
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THR'S
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 PROCESS OF PRODUCING ELECTRICITY BY USING GEOTHERMAL ENERGY.
OVERALL
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IT IS CLEAR THAT
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 THE PROCESS INVOLVED 5 DISTINCIVE STAGES, AND DURING THE PROCESS VARIOUS MACHINES ARE USED.
FIRSTLY
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, COLD
WATER
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PUMPED
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IS PUMPED
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 DOWN FROM THE SURFACE OF
GROUND
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THE GROUND
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 THROUGH THE LONG TUBES. THE
WATER
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 GATHERED IN THE INJECTION WELL. THERE ARE ROCKS WHICH ARE
HOTAND
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HOT AND
 BY MEANS OF THEM
WATER
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 HEATED . THE NEXT STAGE IS WHEN
WATER
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PUMPED
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IS PUMPED
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 BACK BY
PRODUCTION
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THE PRODUCTION
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 WELL TO THE CONDENSER. THE
LAST
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TWOS
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TWO
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 STEPS
ARE
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WERE
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 DONE ABOVE THE GROUND,
CONDENSER
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THE CONDENSER
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TUNRNED
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TURNED
 HOT
WATER
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 INTO STEAM, STEAM LED TO POWERING OF
TURBINE
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THE TURBINE
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, IT
USED
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WAS USED
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 TO POWER
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THE
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GENERATOR WHICH RESULTED IN
PRODUCTION
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THE PRODUCTION
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 OF ELECTRICITY.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • geothermal energy
  • generate electricity
  • diagram
  • volcano
  • magma reservoirs
  • deep underground
  • heat
  • steam
  • geothermal plant
  • turbine
  • condensed
  • pumped back
  • underground reservoirs
  • transmitted
  • power grid
  • distribution
  • continuous
  • renewable
  • volcanic activity
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