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coherence cohesion
Provide a clear and concise introduction that outlines your stance and what the essay will cover. This will guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
Develop more structured paragraphs, clearly separate different points about homeschooling and regular schooling. Use topic sentences to guide the reader.
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Expand on your points by giving more concrete examples or experiences to support your opinions. This will make your arguments more convincing.
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Work on sentence structure and grammar. Avoid small spelling and grammar mistakes to enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
Clarify and expand your conclusion to summarize effectively the main points and restate your position.
task achievement
You have presented both sides of the argument, considering the benefits and disadvantages of homeschooling.
task achievement
Your essay shows a good attempt to balance between homeschooling and regular schooling methods.
coherence cohesion
There is a reasonable level of organization with an introduction, body, and conclusion, even if it needs further development.
Fully explain your ideas
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