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You are going to have a family party in a private room in a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter, say: ● why you need to use this private room ● what you need them to provide for the party ● inquire about the price of the food you are ordering

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Dear Sir/Madam I am writing
this
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 to request you to arrange a private room in your hotel for the
weeding
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wedding
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 anniversary of my parents on 25th December. On
this
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 occasion, we have planned to arrange a dinner and we will invite 50 guests. You should be in charge of
buffet
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the buffet
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 for dinner, decorations and three
storey
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storeys
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of
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apply
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cake structure
as well as
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 we will need a projector because we will run a video of sweet
memeories
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memories
 of my parents. Make sure you have
a
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an
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 electricity backup!
Furthermore
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, you can share quotations of services and ideas
of
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for
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decirations
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decorations
decoration
. Actually , I am poor in
th
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the
 ideas of decoration and give me some information
of
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about
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 the private room. If you have any other ideas please you can discuss
with
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them with
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 me at [email protected] I am looking forward to hearing from you! Yours Faithfully Preet
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Coherence and Cohesion
To enhance coherence, consider organizing the letter into distinct paragraphs for each request or piece of information.
Task Response
Aim to provide a more complete response that covers all requested information in detail, such as specifying dietary preferences for the buffet or mentioning any additional services needed.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter begins and ends with appropriate greetings and closings, enhancing professionalism.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is suitable for a formal request, maintaining respect and politeness.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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