The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provided describes the number of
crimes
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in the UK within different age ranges,
whereas
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the pie chart illustrates their nature, during the
last
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year.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the majority of the
crimes
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are seen to be caused by a particular age group. The type of
crime
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experienced the most is violent
crime
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, whilst public order
crime
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is the least. On the
first
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other
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hand, children below 8
years
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old are the only groups that did not
attempted
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any
crime
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. When it comes to 12
years
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old, these figures went up to roughly 50000
crimes
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. People within a range of 16, 20 and 24 accounted for over 700000, 800000 and 600000, respectively. Beyond 28
years
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old these numbers dropped steadily, from 200000 to over 80000, for
28
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the 28
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and 60
years
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old population, respectively.
On the other hand
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, violent
crimes
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reported
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were reported
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46
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in 46
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% of the total,
while
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the second most experienced
crime
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was property
crime
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, that described
23
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at 23
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%. Property
crime
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was followed closely by drug
crime
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which showed a 22%. The least repeated
crime
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was public order
crime
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with 9%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes, crime, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "describes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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