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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The line graph provided describes the number of
crimes
 in the UK within different age ranges,
whereas
 the pie chart illustrates their nature, during the
last
 year.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the majority of the
crimes
 are seen to be caused by a particular age group. The type of
crime
 experienced the most is violent
crime
, whilst public order
crime
 is the least. On the
first
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other
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 hand, children below 8
years
 old are the only groups that did not
attempted
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attempt
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 any
crime
. When it comes to 12
years
 old, these figures went up to roughly 50000
crimes
. People within a range of 16, 20 and 24 accounted for over 700000, 800000 and 600000, respectively. Beyond 28
years
 old these numbers dropped steadily, from 200000 to over 80000, for
28
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the 28
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 and 60
years
 old population, respectively.
On the other hand
, violent
crimes
reported
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were reported
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46
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in 46
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% of the total,
while
 the second most experienced
crime
 was property
crime
, that described
23
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at 23
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%. Property
crime
 was followed closely by drug
crime
 which showed a 22%. The least repeated
crime
 was public order
crime
 with 9%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes, crime, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "describes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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