The chart below shows the percentage of females aged 16-25 in a particular country who participated in sports, compared with the percentage of people who watched them in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of females aged 16-25 in a particular country who participated in sports, compared with the percentage of people who watched them in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about the
percentage
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of females aged 16 to 25 in a particular country who participated in
sports
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, compared with the
percentage
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of people who watched them in 2000.
Overall
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, the most
popularity
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popular
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of various
sport
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sports
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was basket basketball, because it had the highest and
alomost
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almost
balanced
percentage
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between
participants
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in
sports
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and people who watched them. It was
opposite
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the opposite
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with horse riding and racing which had the lowest
percantage
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percentage
of
participants
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and
watchers
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.
And the
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The
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other
sports
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such
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as tennis, gymnastics, badminton,
golf
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and golf
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tended to be significantly unbalanced between the
participants
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of the
sports
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and the
watchers
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. The
percentage
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between
participants
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and
watchers
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of basketball was about 50% to
approch
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approach
60%. It was not the highest
percentage
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of
participants
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, but it remained steady
percentage
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.
On the other hand
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, tennis had
a unbalanced percentages
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an unbalanced percentage
unbalanced percentages
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between the
participants
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and the
watchers
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. It had the highest
percentage
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of
participants
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, about 60% of
participants
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, but the
percentage
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of the watcher was
a
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apply
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half of the
participants
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. The other
sports
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like gymnastics, badminton, and golf had unbalanced
of
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apply
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participants
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and
watchers
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too. The ratio was almost half and a quarter between
participants
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and
watchers
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.
And the
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The
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most unpopular
sports
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was
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were
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horse riding and racing, the
percentage
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of
the
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apply
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participants
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and
the
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apply
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watchers
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of the sport was the lowest.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, sports, participants, watchers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 10 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • participation rates
  • viewership
  • temporal trends
  • societal attitudes
  • barriers to entry
  • female athletes
  • notable discrepancies
  • speculate
  • reflect
  • influence
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