The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spend doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The first line graph illustrates the proportion of households
who
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owned three electrical devices (washing machines, refrigerators and vacuum cleaners) from 1920 to 2019, and the other line graph demonstrates the average number of hours that each household
had
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spent on doing their relevant duties in their house in a typical week by 2019.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the percentage of having these devices had
climed
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climbed
claimed
by 2019,
while
the amount of time spent on doing housework in
house
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the house
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plummet
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during
this
period. It
also
can
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be
apparently
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extracted
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that
refrigerators'
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refrigerator'
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owners reached the peak in 2019,
although
these types of electric devices had almost no
client
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clients
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in 1920.
According to
the first graph, the proportions of both refrigerators and vacuum cleaners, which were about %3 and %30 in 1920 in order, soar dramatically until 1960 to approximately %90 and %70 respectively,
then
increased moderately to almost %100 for both of them.
In addition
, the percentage of using washing machines which was around %40 in 1920 had rocketed to more than %73 by 2019,
however
, it faced a
little
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small
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dip between 1960 and 1980.
On the other hand
, the number of hours per week that households spent their routines in their home had dropped by 1960 from about %50 (the maximum in 1920) to %20.
Moreover
,
this
decline had continued steadily by 2019 when was the less just above %10.
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