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The maps below show recent changes in town of Kimsvile. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate
changings
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 in the Kimsvile between 2002 and now.
Overall
,
it is clear that
city
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the city
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 changed from
industrial
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an industrial
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 zone to
urban
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an urban
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 place.
Additionally
,new
buldings
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buildings
constracted
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constructed
.
City
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The city
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center
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centre
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,which
built
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was built
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 in the
city
's
center
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centre
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 did not
broken
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break
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 since 2002.
Although
city
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the city
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 had much more trees than now,after cutting trees new apartments
built
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were built
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 in the top left corner of the Kimsvile.
Moreover
,if the factory
demolished
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is demolished
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 after 20 years,
new
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a new
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 Software company built
in stead
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instead
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 of that. After trees
chopped
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were chopped
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 down,
new
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a new
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 football stadium
installed
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was installed
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.
Furthermore
,
old
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the old
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 cinema was
in
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at
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 the end of the
city
center
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centre
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,though
new
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a new
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 pub
established
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was established
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 in that place.
Nevertheless
,
shopping
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the shopping
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center
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centre
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,which was
top
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on top
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 of the
city
center
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centre
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 did not
removed
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remove
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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