in some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case? dos you think this is apositive or negative situation?

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In some countries,
people
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prefer to have a
house
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than to rent a place. In
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why
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is a positive development.
One
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of the main reasons is the stability. Some
people
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to less worry because they don’t have to think about paying rent every week. Another reason is
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investment. Buying a
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could be
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of the
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investments and it is cheaper than renting. Some
people
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choose to buy a
house
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even with
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payment
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plan for years, even though the monthly pay is higher than regular renting,
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it is still counted as
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option because they will be the owner of the
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after years of
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.
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, renting a place requires regular
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as long as they stay in the place.
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, there are some drawbacks to owning a
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like
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expenses and a large sum of money for the deposit as the initial
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to buy a
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. The
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cost of the
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could be
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of the
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why
people
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choose to rent.
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high cost can be
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it
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if we build the
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with good material and
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a well
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plan so renovation is not needed. In regards to the deposit for the initial
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, consulting with the manager property about our financial condition could be a good choice. In conclusion, owning a
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helps with financial stability and could be
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of the investment instruments that
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for our future.
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there are drawbacks to having a
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but
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in my opinion
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is a positive development.
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task achievement
To enhance task response, try to provide more specific examples that illustrate why owning a home is important in certain cultures, as this will help to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Work on varying sentence structures and improve transitions between points to improve coherence and cohesion.
introduction conclusion
The essay provides a clear introduction and a strong conclusion, effectively framing the discussion as a positive development.
logical structure
The main points are logically structured and well aligned with the topic, offering a coherent flow of ideas.
supported main points
You have effectively identified key reasons why owning a home is preferred, such as stability and long-term investment.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Homeownership
  • Financial security
  • Investment
  • Appreciation
  • Cultural symbol
  • Personal achievement
  • Legacy
  • Inheritance
  • Predictability
  • Community roots
  • Stability
  • Status
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