The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts below compare the
proportion
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of different energy
productions
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production
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in France between 1995 and 2005.
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,
whereas
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the consumption of
petrol
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decreased over
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period of time, the opposite could be seen in the other energy. Strikingly, the fossil fuels accounted for a very large majority
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fuels reached a very large majority. In 1995, Coal had the highest
proportion
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with 29.80%, followed by gas
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29,63% and
petrol
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29,27
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%. After 10 years, the
proportion
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of coal and
petrol
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witnessed
slight
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increase.
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, coal was still the highest in the percentage of fossil fuels in France.
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, the
proportion
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of
petrol
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decreased significantly to 19,55%. Renewable energy had the minority. In 1995, nuclear reached 6.40%
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other was lower than nuclear with only 4.90%. In 2005, the
proportion
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of nuclear and other steady growth.
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, the percentage of nuclear weapons was still higher than
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others
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, petrol with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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