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The charts below show what you UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving the college in 2008. summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what you UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving the college in 2008. summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the activities of UK
graduates
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 and
postgraduates
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 in 2008 who did not enter full-time employment after leaving college. The data is divided into four categories part-time
work
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, voluntary
work
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,
further
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 study, and unemployment. It is observed that
further
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 study was the most popular activity for both
graduates
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 and
postgraduates
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,
while
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 voluntary
work
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 attracted the smallest numbers of people.
Additionally
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, a larger proportion of
graduates
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 were unemployed compared to
postgraduates
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. Over the entire period, for
graduates
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 and
postgraduates
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, the largest number of people pursued
further
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 study, at 29,665 and 2,725, respectively.
According to
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 the graph, it was followed by part-time
work
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, which accounted for nearly 20000
graduates
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 and just over 2500
postgraduates
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.
On the other hand
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, it is worth noting that only a small proportion engaged in voluntary
work
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. (3500 for
graduates
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 and 345 for
postgraduates
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).
In addition
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, a large proportion of
graduates
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 (16235) were unemployed compared to
postgraduates
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 (1625).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, postgraduates, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution of activities
  • full-time employment
  • similar trends
  • significant proportion
  • further study
  • part-time work
  • unemployment
  • economic challenges
  • secure jobs
  • post-college activity
  • practical experience
  • additional education
  • volunteer work
  • personal development
  • skill enhancement
  • comparatively
  • niche skillsets
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