The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts give information about the average amount of money
students
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spent each month in 2016,
as well as
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the facilities in which they spent money and their ways of earning.
Overall
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, the highest expenditure was
for
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on
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the
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rent,
while
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the least was on travel.
Students
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loan was a source of
income
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for most of the
students
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.
Students
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average spent £365 for the rent each month, and
this
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was nearly half of their total expenditure. Food and other were respectively the second and the third most costly facilities, with an average expenditure of £124 for food and £91 for others.
Then
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monthly
students
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used less than £70 on bills, socialising and travel. Student
loan
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loans
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represented a source of
income
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for over 80% of the
students
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that have used these sources.
Then
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family and part-time jobs were ways of
income
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for nearly 70% of the
students
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, with family just above part-time jobs.
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, sources of
income
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for around 40% of the
students
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were represented by savings, bank
overdraft
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overdrafts
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and
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grants and funding.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, income with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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