The bar chart below shows of expeditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.
The bar chart illustrates the amount of money spent on five important
expenses
in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom and Japan in 2009.
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Overall
, it can be seen that housing has the highest number of expenditures compared to other countries.
Food, housing and transportation have the biggest number of money consumption in all the 5 countries.
Housing will consume more than 20$ of Linking Words
payment
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while
health care and clothing have the lowest Linking Words
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There is a huge difference in food expenditures Use synonyms
while
the United Linking Words
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pays around 20$ Japan and the United Kingdom will pay more than 20%.
It has shown that the United Kingdom, Canada and Japan provide less than 5% of Fix the agreement mistake
States
expenses
on health care Use synonyms
while
the United States will pay more than 5%.
Canada arranges higher Linking Words
expenses
on transportation with around 20$ in total and has the greatest Use synonyms
payment
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However
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United
States will Correct article usage
the United
also
cover more than 15% of Linking Words
expenses
and is the second highest Use synonyms
payment
compared to other countries.Use synonyms
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