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The map shows the comparison of changes in the library before and after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

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The map illustrates the change
of
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in
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 the
library
 between five
year
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years
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 and
present
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the present
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 to compare
facilities'
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the facilities'
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 location.
Overall
, the
library
 layout has been updated to include modern facilities, which
has
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have
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 replaced some traditional media.
Additionally
, it has been added tremendously new categories of books compared with previous
one
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ones
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. The
library
's entrance, stairs, and librarian's desk have remained the same.
However
, the
library
 now has multiple computers which are opposite the stairs. Newspapers and periodicals which are next to computers have changed to
be
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Films and DVDs to follow new
trend
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trends
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of
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in
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 technology. The
central
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centre
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 of
library
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the library
a library
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where
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which
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 was used to arrange the small table has
been
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taken the place of
longer
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the longer
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 desk and adjusted formet to be row layout. The left side of the
library
 now enlarges four
book's
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books'
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 genres
include
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including
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 fiction, kitchen, economics, and law, cached only two groups;
self help
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, and history. Children's area occupies
on
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the space where is never used.
Moreover
, the shelf of fiction has given place to children's books where is near the children's area to encourage young people
for learning
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to learn
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 and
playing
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play
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • comparison
  • significant changes
  • modernize
  • technological facilities
  • computer stations
  • digital book borrowing
  • interactive learning
  • family-friendly spaces
  • cafe or lounge area
  • social interaction
  • open spaces
  • flexible seating arrangements
  • collaborative work
  • community events
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