The charts below give information about travel to and from France, as well as the most popular countries for French citizens to visit in 2000.

The given line graph demonstrates data on how many people
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the
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visited abroad, and how many overseas residents visited
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the
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between 1979 and 1999,
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data about how many people visited
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the
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from 5 countries in 1999.
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the
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increased significantly from 1979 to 1999, but
statistics
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of residents
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overseas
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the
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, experienced
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slightly rose
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France was dominant in 1999, but
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trend in Turkey considerable less than one. As regards
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of tourists who visited the
UK
gradually increased from 13 to 20 between 1979 and 1984;
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sharply rose
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in the next 11 years.
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,
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of overseas inhabitants who came
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UK
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between 1979 and 1984, remained unchanged at 10 but rapidly rose from 10 to 25 in the next decade. When it comes to
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of residents of France who visited the
UK
was dominant at 12 in the 1999 years.
Additionally
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of the Spain in the next list of the topic at 8 in the year.
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lowest point at 3 in 1999.
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of Greece and the USA
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, statistics with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Economic development
  • Globalization
  • Cross-cultural exchanges
  • Tourist attractions
  • Cultural affinity
  • Historical links
  • Geographical trends
  • Proximity factors
  • Regional preferences
  • Promotional campaigns
  • Seasonal travel patterns
  • Preference
  • Beach holiday
  • Cultural holiday
  • Adventure holiday
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