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Topic: The graph below shows the number of students from the US, the UK and Australia who studied in universities in other countries from 2002 to 2007.

Topic: The graph below shows the number of students from the US, the UK and Australia who studied in universities in other countries from 2002 to 2007.
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The line graph
illustrate
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 information about
total
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the total
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students
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number of students
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 from the US, UK and Australia who study abroad
in
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over
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 5
years
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 period.
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, it can be seen that
total
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a total
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number
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 of
students
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 remained stable
exept
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except
 the UK which has significantly decreased over the
years
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. The US has the highest
number
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 of total
students
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 with 50.000 and Australia has the lowest with just 10.000. UK
students
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number
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 started
with
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at
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 30.000 in 2002 and
remaind
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remained
remain
 steady in 2003
while
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 it has slightly
droped
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dropped
 to less than 30.000
whereas
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 the US
learner
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learners
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fall
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fell
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 down from 50.000 in 2004 but started
risen up
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rising
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 in the
followoing
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following
years
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 and
reaches
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reached
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out to
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apply
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the same level in 2007. Australian
students
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number has
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have
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 not significantly changed over the
years
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 and remained steady
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apply
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although
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, it has
experience
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experienced
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 a decline in 2004 but
leveled
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levelled
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 up
the
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at the
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 same rate in 2007.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, years, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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