Write a letter to your neighbor (who is also your friend) about the damage that occurs to your car while he parks his car in the space allotted to you. In the letter, you should: Describe the damage Say how you feel about this problem. Suggest on actions he should take.

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Dear Rajan, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to express my concern regarding the scratches on
left
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side of my Black Elantra 2024 ,Hybrid model DATH864 that
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while
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you
park
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your White Sedan 8264 in my personal parking spot. I bought
this
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car
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just
few
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months back in August and you know how hard I worked to get
this
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dream
car
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.
This
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is really close to my heart as
this
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is one of my biggest
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. It breaks my heart to see all those big scratches on
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side of the
car
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that happens when you park your sedan
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besides
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my
car
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in my
alloted
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allocated
allotted
parking space.
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I pay
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charge to the landlord every month just to keep my
car
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safe. The scratches are so bad that even painting the
car
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would not be able to
fix
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. Even though the
car
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is insured to fix
this
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problem I have to send my
car
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to
showroom
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for a week.
This
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will cause me
alot
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a lot
of
inconvinience
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inconvenience
as you know my workplace is far away from our residential area and I will have to spend extra hours of my day commuting
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public
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transport during
this
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period. I would highly recommend you to not use my
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allocated
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parking space as it
it
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not safe
as well as
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it breaks the law and order. You might face consequences in future from traffic and safety police for breaking the parking rules. I would suggest you
to
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use street parking for now until winter or you can use your garage to park your
car
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.
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, I would appreciate your help if you
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drop me off at my workplace every morning as we both work in
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a same
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commercial area. Your Prompt reply can help me address these issues effectively. Regards, Faiza
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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking the first paragraph into two: one for describing the damage and another for expressing personal feelings regarding the car and the damage.
task achievement
Try to clarify the sentence about paying extra charges to the landlord for parking. It could be constructed more clearly to convey the point more effectively.
coherence cohesion
The closing is friendly and inviting, which is appropriate given the context of writing to a neighbor who is also a friend.
task achievement
The tone of the letter remains polite and addresses the problem without being confrontational, which is important in maintaining good relations with neighbors.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allocating
  • allotted space
  • damage
  • dents
  • scratches
  • repairs
  • responsibility
  • compensation
  • convenience
  • inconvenience
  • empathy
  • respect
  • resolve
  • mutual understanding
  • precautionary measures
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