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Fast food is very popular these days and many people depend on fast food as their main meals. What are the advantages and disadvantages of eating fast food?

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 day and age, junk
food
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 is widely
favored
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 and a majority of individuals
to
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choose fast
food
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 as their main
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meals
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meal
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. Throughout the following paragraphs, not only beneficial aspects but
also
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 detrimental aspects will be examined. On the
one
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 hand, there are a variety of benefits associated with eating fast
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foods
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food
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. The primary reason is that convenience
foods
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 can reduce
time
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the time
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 to prepare
meals
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.
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 reason, it can lead to people who
had
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fast-paced
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a fast-paced
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 lifestyle always
choose
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choosing
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 fast
foods
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firstly
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. Officers,
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, do not have
sufficiently
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 time in the
moring
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morning
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prefer
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and prefer
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 to buy
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foods
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food
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 from
convenince
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convenience
 stores close to their
home
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homes
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that
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 can
decreasing
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 the number of morning activity times. Pricing of
convenince
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convenience
foods
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 is the
last
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 disadvantage to be taken into account.
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, if we compare
a
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the
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 price of
meals
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, fast
foods
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were
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 the cheapest;
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,
it
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they
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gives
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 you high energy
with
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at
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affordable
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 price.
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,
although
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 there are some
favorable
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 aspects of having junk
foods
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, a number of drawbacks should be well-considered. The initial and most obvious
one
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 is that some diseases
caused
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 by fast
foods
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. In the long term, it leads to obesity that
occur
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negative
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a negative
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 effect on
one
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's life. Another disadvantage key factor is that fast
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such
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 as burgers, pizzas, and fries were tasty but
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had less
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less
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 nutrients.
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 reason, individuals especially youngsters prefer to eat junk
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foods
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food
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 on the grounds
of
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apply
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that more and more people are
lkely
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likely
to
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overweight. In conclusion, even though there are some advantages of eating fast
food
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, I hold the view that
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 outweigh them. If individuals depend on fast
food
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 as their main
meals
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, it is almost certain that they will
occur
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negative
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a negative
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 effect on
one
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's life and lead to obesity or some diseases.
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task achievement
Your essay covers both the advantages and disadvantages of fast food, addressing the topic adequately. However, try to provide more specific examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Consider improving the logical flow of the essay. Some points need clearer connections to enhance overall structure and readability.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure all sentences are clear and well-constructed. Some parts can be improved by refining grammar and word choice.
coherence and cohesion
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
You effectively highlighted both the pros and cons of fast food, demonstrating a balanced view on the topic.
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