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You have visited another city in your country. Prior to the visit you requested some information from a tourist centre, but the information was incorrect. Write a letter to the manager of the centre and say What information were you looking for What was incorrect in it What happened to you because of it

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you about the incorrect information in your detail book which
provided
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was provided
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 by the centre ten days ago. My
trip
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 to Dubai was very enjoyable,
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however
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 the schedule of some places like
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the museum
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museum
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museums
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 was inaccurate
as
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and as
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 a result we faced some difficulties. Me and my husband had planned everything after observing your tourist book so that we could enjoy
without
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it without
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 wastage of time. On the third day of
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trip
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the trip
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, we reached
at
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apply
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the museum at 9AM on
saturday
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Saturday
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,
unfortunatly
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unfortunately
, the guard mentioned
us
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to us
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 that
this
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 place
is
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had been
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 closed since
october
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October
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due to
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Morover
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Moreover
, the price of the ticket for the zoo is not $200 which is
also
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 false in your book. The correct price is $300. Many problems were faced by us because
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trip
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costs
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 more than our budget. We had to change the plans
at
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for
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 the
trip
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 and everything was messed up. The taxi expenses and
tickets price
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ticket prices
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 were more than the budget. It is requested take strict
actions
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action
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 on it as soon you can so that other people do not face any
problem
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problems
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. Yours faithfully, Upinder Kaur

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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down your ideas into clearer, more distinct paragraphs. This helps direct your reader effortlessly through your letter.
task achievement
Ensure that all points about what you intended to do with the information, and the consequences, are clearly outlined to fully satisfy the task's requirements.
task achievement
The letter maintains a suitable formal tone and clear purpose throughout, presenting the issue respectfully to the manager.
coherence cohesion
Effective opening and closing of the letter are demonstrated, with a clear greeting and sign-off, enhancing the letter's structure.
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