You have visited another city in your country. Prior to the visit you requested some information from a tourist centre, but the information was incorrect. Write a letter to the manager of the centre and say What information were you looking for What was incorrect in it What happened to you because of it

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Dear Sir, I am writing

this

letter to inform you about the incorrect information in your detail book which

provided

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by the centre ten days ago. My

trip

to Dubai was very enjoyable,

however

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the schedule of some places like

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the museum

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museum

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museums

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was inaccurate

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and as

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a result we faced some difficulties. Me and my husband had planned everything after observing your tourist book so that we could enjoy

without

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wastage of time. On the third day of

trip

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the trip

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, we reached

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the museum at 9AM on

saturday

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Saturday

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unfortunatly

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unfortunately

, the guard mentioned

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to us

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that

this

place

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closed since

october

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October

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due to

construction.

Morover

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Moreover

, the price of the ticket for the zoo is not $200 which is

also

false in your book. The correct price is $300. Many problems were faced by us because

this

trip

costs

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more than our budget. We had to change the plans

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for

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the

trip

and everything was messed up. The taxi expenses and

tickets price

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ticket prices

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were more than the budget. It is requested take strict

actions

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action

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on it as soon you can so that other people do not face any

problem

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. Yours faithfully, Upinder Kaur

Submitted by upinder7696 on Tue Nov 26 2024

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coherence cohesion

Consider breaking down your ideas into clearer, more distinct paragraphs. This helps direct your reader effortlessly through your letter.

task achievement

Ensure that all points about what you intended to do with the information, and the consequences, are clearly outlined to fully satisfy the task's requirements.

task achievement

The letter maintains a suitable formal tone and clear purpose throughout, presenting the issue respectfully to the manager.

coherence cohesion

Effective opening and closing of the letter are demonstrated, with a clear greeting and sign-off, enhancing the letter's structure.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

189 words

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