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The maps below show a town centre in 1990 and the same town centre today.

#maps #show #town #centre
The following maps illustrate
chages
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changes
of
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 a particular town centre's
lay out
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layout
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 in 1990 and nowadays.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that there were both major and minor improvements: renovation and addition, in the communities.
However
, it is interesting to note that local facilities except shops remained the same.
To begin
 with, a closer look
in
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 the map in 1990
can be noticed
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shows
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 that houses were zoned in the southern part of the map along
the
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Green
street
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Street
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. Park, library and Town hall were cornered with four different streets. Small shops for buying groceries, meats, bread and coffee and
newspaper
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newspapers
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lied
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lay
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 next to
childcare
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the childcare
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center
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centre
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 on Smith
street
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Street
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 and two banks
one
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on
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the
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Oldfield
street
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Street
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 to adjacent
of
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the map. In
regards
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with
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recent
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the recent
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blue print
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blueprint
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, there were some changes in two aspects; buildings and streets.
One
, in terms of buildings, small local businesses next to
Childcare
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the Childcare
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center
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centre
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now
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are now
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 combined and replaced with shopping
mall
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malls
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 and houses changed into
an apartment blocks
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an apartment block
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.
Secondly
, on the road, Smith
street
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 now turned into
pedestrian
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a pedestrian
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street
 and two
crossing
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crossings
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 were added;
one
one
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on
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the
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Oldfield
street
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Street
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 and another on Green
street
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Street
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words street, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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