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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it /ooks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant.

In these
maps
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 we see the change of a
porth
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port
 harbour between 2000 and today.
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, several things
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 as
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structures,
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 have been added. Others have been relocated. There are even things that were once something and now have changed their function. All
this
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 is
due to
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 the passage of time and the need to adapt. If we look with more detail at the maps, we can see that many things have been added.
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, some new showers and toilets, a new dock and a place dedicated to cafes and shops.
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, a road has been created as well in order to make
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access to the hotel easier.
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, other places have changed their function.
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, the private yacht and fishing boat areas have been inverted.
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, what used to be the castle has become a hotel
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, which
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also
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 has a private beach that was previously public.

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General
Start with a clear view of the map, and finish with a short wrap up.
Structure
Use one idea per paragraph and link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'but', 'then'.
Content
Give clear map facts. Say a few exact changes with numbers if you can.
Language
Be exact with word use. Use 'became', 'turned into', 'moved', 'added' not hard or new words.
Concept
The idea of comparing the map in 2000 and today is clear.
Structure
Good use of linking words to show flow.
Content
The piece gives examples of changes on the harbour.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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