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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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Provided
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 illustration represents
rehabilitation
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the rehabilitation
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 of West
park secondary
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Park Secondary
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School
 starting
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in
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 1950.The three Images depict
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changing of the spot within thirty years of difference. Similarities these plans have encompass
: Main
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the main
 road and
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the
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size of
school
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the school
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 building. Beginning in 1950,
school
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the school
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 was surrounded by houses on the left,
playground
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a playground
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 on the back and
right
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a right
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 next to
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farmland.
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 years later
school
 expanded and a science block was added to it, meaning existing space became the main building. We clearly observe that houses were completely removed,
instead
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 a car park was added to the complex.
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 farmland was recreated
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 a sports field and the playground stayed the same. In 2010 slight changes had been made on the site.
Car
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 park was extended at the expense of the sports field , which caused the deduction of playground space as well. In conclusion, The site has gone through a significant change since 1950. The difference between the first and
last
 image is clear. Sch0ol expanded and
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the environment
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 around it adapted to its needs.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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