You are renting a car from an agency. Your rent was for one month but you need to stop the rent two weeks early. Write a letter to the agency. In your letter introduce yourself ask to stop the rent before the contract finishes explain why you need to break the contract. Write at least 150 words

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
the
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latter
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letter
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to ask
the
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return of the $650
deposit
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that I paid to you before I rented your
car
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,
in
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which is an
avanza
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Avanza
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type
car
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that I
rents
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rented
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in
Juni
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June
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ago at Agus Rent and I
was return
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was returning
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your
car
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in
a great conditions
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. When I sent a
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to your place about
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problem, they said that I will not accept
back
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my
deposit
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and I
was
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ununderstand
to
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this
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reason because before I
sign
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my contract agreement, I saw that the
deposit
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will back
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to me after I returned the
car
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. I hope you will
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be responsibility
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responsibility
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to
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this
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problem. I believe that I have kept to the terms of the agreement. So, I will wait for your good decision within 24 hours. If I have not accepted back my
deposit
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, I will report
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accident to legal action. Your Faithfully, Sugeng Paijo

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task achievement
Make sure to include all points from the prompt, including introducing yourself and explaining why you need to end the rental early. This part is missing in your letter, and it's important to address the task fully.
coherence cohesion
The letter lacks clear paragraphing. Each key point (i.e., introducing yourself, asking to end the rental, explaining why) should be in a separate paragraph for clarity.
greeting and closing
You have a clear closing statement with a polite sign-off, which enhances the formality of the letter.
task achievement
You have made an attempt to explain the situation regarding the deposit and your concerns, which is an important element of task response.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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