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The table shows the number of exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia and vice versa. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. ]

The table shows the number of exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia and vice versa. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. ]
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Both diagrams demonstrate the data of pupils exchanged from Australia to Europe and the other way round.
Overall
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, it is seen that the total results among the five countries are completely different
at the end
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 of the period given. The average amount of
students
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went
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who went
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 to Australia
showing
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showed
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 an upward trend,
whereas
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 the count moved to Europe remained
steadily
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steady
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 over the 2 years.
First,
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as for the
students
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shifted
Correct pronoun usage
who shifted
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 to Australia, only Sweden and Germany have increased in extent, having 42 and 63 pupils respectively after the initial rise.
In contrast
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, other countries' statistics remained
steadily
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steady
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 or plunged
such
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 as
United
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the United
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 Kingdom,
which
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whose
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 number dropped from 31 to 25 in 2 years.
As a result
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, the total has rocketed from 186 to 226
students
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 from 2007 to 2009.
Lastly
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, The Netherlands is the only country which statistics cut in half counting 18
students
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 in 2009,
while
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 having 32 in 2007.
Furthermore
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, France is the single country that has surged in amount from 37 to 58 throughout the whole period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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