The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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It is argued that in several states, having a
house
is more important than renting it. This
essay
believes that having a house
prompts better security of tenure, and this
essay
thinks that this
is a positive development
, as tenure security is crucial to ensure the well-being of residents.
By owning a house
, people are more likely to have better levels of housing security. While
many believe renting a home
is significantly cheaper, the additional cost which someone is paying to own a home
is pivotal in providing a secure, well-protected home
. This
is because full ownership of a home
means higher levels of legal status, which could be very crucial to secure residents' well-being in the future. For instance
, many Indonesian citizens prefer to borrow money with high interest rates from banks in order to buy homes, rather than just renting them. This
is because they believe by owning a home
, they will have a more secure home
for their future.
A more positive outlook towards buying a house
than renting it is a positive development
because this
means better legal protection for residents. Several countries, such
as Indonesia, do not have any legal provisions regarding house
renting, as a result
, most renters are in a very precarious state. That is
to say, having a house
serves as one of the measures to protect people from having to deal with such
situations. Even at times when relocation is inevitable, owning a house
could mean better compensation. For example
, in Indonesia, when houses are going to be demolished for infrastructure development
, individuals
with full legal entitlement over their houses are entitled to a higher compensation price compared to those who do not have full ownership over their houses.
To conclude
, this
essay
thinks the phenomenon in which many individuals
prefer owning a home
rather than renting one happens because numerous individuals
are trying to secure their housing rights. This
essay
believes that this
is a positive development
,
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this
could protect individuals
' rights over their house
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