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The maps below show the science park in the present day and how it looked in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show the science park in the present day and how it looked in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The map illustrates the buildings and roads of the science
park
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at
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in
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 the present day and how it looked in 2008.
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, it is noticeable that many new cycle paths were built, and all of the grasslands were demolished. Looking at the information in more detail, there were three new cycle paths constructed; two of them were around the car
park
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, and another was on the eastern side of the
park
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.
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, the offices and the business units stayed in their original positions as they were in 2008,
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 the IT
center
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 was replaced with the Innovation
center
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.
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, in 2008, the science
park
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 had 10 grass areas, but nowadays none of them remain;
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, research and development was built
instead
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 of the northwestern grasslands.
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, the car
park
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 and the cyber security area had some changes,
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 a new western block added to the IT security area, leading to the car
park
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 becoming more tiny than it was in the past. One of the most significant changes was the construction of the bus stop beyond the cyber security area and the railway station on the southern corner of the map.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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