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The graph gives information about coffee production in 4 different countries from 1990 to 2010.

The graph gives information about coffee production in 4 different countries from 1990 to 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates the manufacturing of
coffee
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 in four different regions in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2010. One stirring feature of the chart is that, from 1990 to 1995 the
cultivating
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 of
coffee
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 in Indonesia and Vietnam remained static. The
cultivating
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 of
coffee
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 in Brazil from 1990 to 1995 in 5 years increase approximately from 0.7
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 and reaches one
million
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.
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, Columbia shows a downward trend,
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production
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with production
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coffee
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of coffee
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drop
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 from 0.6
million
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tones
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 to about 0.5
million
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tones
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. From 2000 to 2010 Brazil still hold the position of the largest
coffee
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 manufacturer country. Their
production
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 of
coffee
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 crossed just over
a
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1.8
million
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 tons. Meanwhile, the second leader was Columbia in 2000, but he took
last
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 place in 2010. In one decade, The
production
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 of
coffee
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 in Vietnam and Indonesia progressively
increase
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increases
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 and reaches nearly
quarter
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a quarter
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million
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tones
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tonnes
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.
Overall
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, the most striking feature of the chart is the
production
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 of
coffee
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shoot
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shot
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 up in Brazil, but in Columbia over the period it is
plummet
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plummeting
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.
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, in Indonesia and Vietnam has increased since 2000 year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, million, tones, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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