Social media has harmed people’s social life. Do you agree or disagree? Write a one-sided opinion essay giving reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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For many
people
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in today's world, social
media
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plays a significant role in their daily lives. Over the years, modern innovations in technology have transformed the way we communicate. In my opinion, social
media
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positively impacts
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individuals
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individuals'
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life
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because it
made
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makes
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people
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always
incontect
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in contact
and allows
people
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to
have
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communication
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with others from various
different
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countries.
To begin
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with, social
media
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has improved social
life
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because it made
individuals
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always
incontect
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in contact
contact
.
First,
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new social
media
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platforms
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such
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as
Snap chat
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Snapchat
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and
Instgram
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Instagram
made families and friends more closely through following each other.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, new
platforms
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help to enhance the relationship with
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a new
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friend
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friends
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with
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being
incontent
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content
in content
together through
massages
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messages
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or posts. In brief, being
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incontinent
is the one of
advanteges
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advantages
of new technology to improve
people
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's social
life
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.
In addition
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, another benefit of new
platforms
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is it allows
individuals
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to
commuincate
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communicate
with others from many different
contries
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countries
.
For example
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, new
platforms
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offers
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the ability to
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a new friend from another nation, which increases the number of relationships for the person.
Moreover
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, if a friend or a family member
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, you will have access to communicate
them
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with them
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throght
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through
Whatsapp. In short,
communication
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with others, when they
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in different nations is one of the benefits of social
media
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in promoting social
life
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. In conclusion, I believe that new
platforms
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beneficially
affects
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people
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people's
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social
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life
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due to
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the
increasing
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in
connection
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the connection
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between
other
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others
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and it made
the
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apply
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communication
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with
individuals
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in other nations easier. Being
incontent
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in contact
with new friends,
family
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and family
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members and
the
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apply
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communication
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communicating
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with other
people
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from different nations are some of the benefits of social
media
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in social
life
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. Using the new
platforms
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in a good way is essential to enhance
people
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's social
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life
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.
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language
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task response
Ensure all main points are clearly supported with specific examples. Examples can lend weight and clarity to your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction clearly presents your opinion and sets the stage for the essay. You provided a concise overview of your main points.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and reinforces your opinion, providing a strong ending to the essay.
task achievement
You have offered a complete response to the task prompt, addressing how social media impacts social life positively.
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