There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this

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There is no denying the fact that having
children
for married
couples
is a sacred thing.
While
it is a commonly held belief that spouses should
to
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remain childless
due to
various challenges these days, there is
also
an argument that opposes
this
decision.
This
essay will analyse
this
topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand,
couples
may decide not to have
children
through the difficulties these days.
In other words
, life becomes more complicated
due to
various aspects
such
as
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high
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the high
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cost of living
,
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and, spread
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spread
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of violence and conflict in many areas around the world.
For example
, in some African nations like Sudan and Somalia conflict and reduction of standard of living may lead to deciding to remain childless.
On the other hand
, having kids has a lot of benefits despite
of
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any existing challenges. It is possible to say that
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of
children
in family life plays a crucial role in feeling happiness
especially
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for mothers.
Moreover
, having
children
has its own long-term future benefits.
For instance
,
couples
who have sons will find who
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them when they
older
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and they can rely on for any assistance. In conclusion, in spite of answering
this
question is not easy, I tend to believe that having
children
is more beneficial especially when the
couples
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older
as well
as
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and
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that
add
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a lot of vitality to family life and
make
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a marriage
with
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it
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full
meaning
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.
Therefore
, I suggest
to
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, in the
worth
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worst
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cases spouses can
to
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delay the idea of having kids
not
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and not
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to
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cancel it at all.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • childfree
  • personal freedom
  • financial stress
  • raising children
  • nurturing the relationship
  • societal pressure
  • stigma
  • support network
  • companionship
  • legacy
  • regret
  • intimate bond
  • norm
  • invest in experiences
  • close-knit
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