There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this
There is no denying the fact that having
children
for married Use synonyms
couples
is a sacred thing. Use synonyms
While
it is a commonly held belief that spouses should Linking Words
to
remain childless Change the verb form
apply
due to
various challenges these days, there is Linking Words
also
an argument that opposes Linking Words
this
decision. Linking Words
This
essay will analyse Linking Words
this
topic from both points of view and express my opinion.
On one hand, Linking Words
couples
may decide not to have Use synonyms
children
through the difficulties these days. Use synonyms
In other words
, life becomes more complicated Linking Words
due to
various aspects Linking Words
such
asLinking Words
,
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apply
high
cost of livingCorrect article usage
the high
,
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and, spread
spread
of violence and conflict in many areas around the world. Add an article
the spread
For example
, in some African nations like Sudan and Somalia conflict and reduction of standard of living may lead to deciding to remain childless.
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On the other hand
, having kids has a lot of benefits despite Linking Words
of
any existing challenges. It is possible to say that Change preposition
apply
presence
of Correct article usage
the presence
children
in family life plays a crucial role in feeling happiness Use synonyms
especially
for mothers. Add the comma(s)
, especially
Moreover
, having Linking Words
children
has its own long-term future benefits. Use synonyms
For instance
, Linking Words
couples
who have sons will find who Use synonyms
help
them when they Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
older
and they can rely on for any assistance.
In conclusion, in spite of answering Add a missing verb
are older
this
question is not easy, I tend to believe that having Linking Words
children
is more beneficial especially when the Use synonyms
couples
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being
older Wrong verb form
are
as well
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as
that Correct word choice
and
add
a lot of vitality to family life and Change the verb form
adds
make
a marriage Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
with
Change preposition
apply
it
full Correct pronoun usage
apply
meaning
. Change preposition
of meaning
Therefore
, I suggest Linking Words
to
, in the Change preposition
that
worth
cases spouses can Correct word choice
worst
to
delay the idea of having kids Fix the infinitive
apply
not
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and not
to
cancel it at all.Fix the infinitive
apply
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