Some people spent most of their lives living close to where they born. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Many people think that staying in the same city in which they were born is a great
place
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to spend a whole
life
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but, others are saying there are some disadvantages to staying in one
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. In
this
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essay, we will find
why
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people prefer to spend their
life
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in one
place
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only and will discuss what advantages and disadvantages there can be.
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, all humans have beliefs regarding their comfort zone; they don’t want to do anything out of the box or new challenging items in
life
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. Staying
at
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in
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the same
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since they are born will give a number of advantages like being connected with the family throughout
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, connected with same childhood friends and some would like to stay
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their business
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which they got in heritage. Many humans
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like to stay
at
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the same
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because if they want to establish
the
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business in the city where they
were
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living since childhood it will be easy to set up as they know many things and building connections can become easy by using references. Sometimes staying
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the same
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can
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stop the growth of humans as they are introverted in their
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life
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because they wouldn't get
chance
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a chance
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to connect with new people or
culture
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cultures
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. Not only, they lose the better job opportunity if it is in another city or country but they will
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not understand responsibility and will never try to do a challenging job.
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, one should stay
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in
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the same
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but for
certain
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a certain
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time they should leave that
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for studying or for job purposes. Because that will teach them
real
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real-life
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life
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lessons and values.
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The essay addresses both advantages and disadvantages, which shows a complete response to the task.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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