The diagram below shows the multistage production of pears as canned fruits. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the process below.

The diagram below shows the multistage production of pears as canned fruits. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the process below.
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The diagram describes the process of making canned
pears
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.
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, it can be seen that it includes 13 stages starting from hand picking of
pears
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to the final product which is dispatched for consumers.
To begin
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with, the step is hand picking of
pears
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,
after
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this
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the
hand picked
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fruits get transported for washing to free from dirt and other things, followed by quality checking, where
pears
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are thoroughly checked for
damages
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and
then
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the good ones get stored in
cold
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a cold
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room. After that, the
pears
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are weighed and graded.
Subsequently
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, After the weighing stage, the
pears
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are peeled for coring and slicing.
Next,
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the canning is done followed by sealing cans for cooking and sterilizing,
This
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stages
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kills all the bacteria or other micro-organisms which may be harmful to
the
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mankind.
At the end
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of
canning
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the canning
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stage, the cans which are ready will be labelled and stored until they are transported to the consumers.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pears with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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