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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts represent the average percentages of three unhealthy nutrients in
meals
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 when consumed in excessive amounts in the USA. The first type is sodium, which is mostly consumed at dinner
time
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 for about 43% on average. It has a proportion of 29% of consumption during lunchtime. The intake of it during breakfast and
snack
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time
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 is the same percentage, which is 14% of the intake.
On the other hand
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, 37% of saturated fat is eaten during night
meals
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. 26% of them are taken during lunch, and 21% during
snack
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time
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. Yet, only 16% are consumed during morning
meals
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.
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, added sugar is taken during
snack
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time
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 at 42%, 23% at night
time
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, and 19% at afternoon
meals
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. Meanwhile, only 16% are taken on morning
meals
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.
To sum up
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, sodium has the highest rate of consumption during dinner, followed by saturated fat. On the other side, added sugar is excessively consumed during
snack
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time
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meals, time, snack with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average percentages
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • meal
  • typical meals
  • categories
  • high percentage
  • distribution
  • patterns
  • trends
  • nutrient-dense
  • data
  • comparison
  • summarize
  • reporting main features
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