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Band 5

some employers want to be able to contact their staaf at all times, even on holidays. Does this development have more advantages than disadvantages.

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In these
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 days, people looking
to
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for
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job
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a job
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 and want to
work
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 every
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get
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holidays
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holiday
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. so in
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essay
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times
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, that will help them to improve.
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, they will learn new information
as well as
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, they have got a
knowladge
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knowledge
 about how they dealing of their
job
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.
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, their
maind
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mind
main
 will develop by them, to clarify,the employers will make
alot
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a lot
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job
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 after that, they will have experience in their
work
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 and
also
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 they will promotion in the
job
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. So, that will support them to get high salaries with more
experinces
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experience
experiences
.
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other
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the other
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 hand, if they
busy
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are busy
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all
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at all
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times
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time
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, they can't do
any things
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anything
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 for
them
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themselves
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 and family, but
this
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 is
a
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consider
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considered
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 negative . To illustrate, they
knowing
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know
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 that after
work
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 the body and mind need to rest , because that
good
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 for their psychology and
mentale
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mental
.
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, they should sit with their family and
tallk
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talk
 with them, that's
help
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helps
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 them to be
comefortable
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comfortable
 and
reduced
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reduces
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 the conflict
work
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.
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, they are telling about their
job
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 with family and friends ,
this
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 way will
helps
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help
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 them more.
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, when they
did't
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don't
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a
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apply
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time
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 to go
a
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on a
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trip with friends , they will feel sad and
pressure
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pressured
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of
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by
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work
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 and will
dcline
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decline
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of
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from
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work
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. So,
they
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there
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 should be
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a balance
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balance
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balanced
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of
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apply
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their
work
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 and
holidys
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holidays
,
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due
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because
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 to will support them to be active and happy.
To
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 conclusion, most people prefer to
work
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take
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taking
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vacation
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a vacation
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, they
thinking
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think
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 that will improve
in
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apply
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their
job
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as well as
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 they are getting
alot
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a lot
 of money and gifts, but I believe that they have to spend both sides and
work
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time
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work
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 and spend their
time
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 of holiday in
it
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its
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time
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.

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coherence cohesion
Improve paragraph structure by separating ideas more clearly and consistently. This will enhance the reader's understanding and flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Work on presenting a clearer introduction that outlines the main points you will discuss in the essay. A well-defined thesis statement would strengthen your response.
task achievement
Ensure that examples are clear and closely aligned with the main points you make to illustrate ideas effectively.
task achievement
Pay attention to grammar and vocabulary accuracy for clearer expression of ideas.
task achievement
You present both the advantages and disadvantages of the issue, providing a balanced view in your essay.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your main points and provides a personal opinion, ensuring that your argument is clear.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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