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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates the
number
 of temporary migrant
workers
 in Australia, New Zealand,
United
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 Kingdom and
United
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the United
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 States in 2003 and 2006,
as well as
 the
number
 of these
workers
 per 1000
people
 in 2006.
Overall
, the
number
 of temporary
migrant
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migrants
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 sharply increased in all four countries over the three
period
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,
however
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 there are significant differences with respect to the population. In 2006, the
number
 of temporary migrant
workers
 increased by almost 50% in Australia, and by
a
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about a third in New Zealand, notably, in the United Kingdom their
number
 approximately doubled,
raising
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 from 137,000 to 266,00.
In contrast
, the United
Stated
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States
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, despite having the highest
number
 of
migrant
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migrants
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, recorded the smallest increase, by around 20%. In terms of migrant
workers
 per 1,000
people
 in 2006, despite the large absolute numbers, the United States, had the lowest ratio at just 2.3 per 1,000
people
.
On the contrary
, despite being the country with the smallest increase, New Zealand had the largest
number
 of
migrant
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migrants
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 compared to the population: there were more than 20 migrants per 1000
people
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, workers, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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