Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

It is usually thought that social
media
are negatively affecting
the
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society
as a whole but
also
each person separately. In my opinion, I agree with
this
statement, but I
also
believe there are many benefits that equalize the drawbacks. First of all, it is scientifically
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that social networking
sites
, like Instagram, have indeed
negative
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impact on individuals and
society
. Usually,
people
post on social
media
about their best and "happiest" moments. So, it is
very
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common case for
people
to feel anxiety and depression because they are comparing their lives, which at the time
it
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might not be so interesting, with someone else's life.
Furthermore
, social networking
sites
provide
also
unlimited entertaining content for their users.
This
, in my opinion, implies that users spend a
big
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amount of their free time on their smartphone/
pc
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and not
in
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resting or doing something productive. Nowadays, because more and more
people
are using daily social
media
,
this
negatively affects
also
the
society
as a whole.
On the other hand
, I believe that social
media
offer
also
many benefits to
society
and individuals. More specifically, social networking
sites
can be used as a tool for individual producers to promote their products and so they help them to reach
bigger
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audience.
Moreover
, they offer the possibility for users to connect with new
people
from all around the world, through text and voice/video calls. So,
people
can communicate
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and more frequently and
this
can I believe
that
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can help build
cohese
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cohesive
societies. In conclusion, I agree that social networking
sites
have a negative impact
in
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society
and individuals, but because I believe that there are
also
positive things that they can offer, I think that their positive and negative impact is balanced.
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The essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a coherent structure to the discussion.
task achievement
The essay addresses both the negative and positive impacts of social networking sites, offering a balanced perspective.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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