Many newspapers and magazines feature stories about the private lives of famous people. We know what they eat, where they buy their clothes and who they love. We also often see pictures of them in private situations. Is it appropriate for a magazine or newspaper to give this kind of private information about people?

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Generally, the public
read
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daily
jounals
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journals
journal
(imtahanda səhv yazmışam) to find out about the world's current affairs and they read
magazines
to be entertained. At
the
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present,
newpapers
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newspapers
and
magazines
getting wider popularity by featuring
private
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activity
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activities
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of celebrities. They are presenting the silliest part of their being to the most personal aspects which is sometimes disturbing. I personally believe that it is not noble to expose someone's personal life in
newspapers
. Apparently, there are several reasons why
community's
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the community's
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personal lives should not be in the newspaper.
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example, the fact that
princess
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Diana is going out with a sportsman is not important information,
secondly
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if
newspapers
want to publish articles about famous folk they should focus on their public events and achievements.
In other
words
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it would be wiser if there is an article about
princess
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Diana about her works of charity. Which will increase public awareness of important problems.
In addition
,
journalist
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journalists
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should make sure that they write about the facts only not rumours. One should be able to rely on
newspapers
for the actual truth.
Magazines
,
on the other hand
, focus on social news, but I feel it is more acceptable for them to contain some features about famous personalities. It is often observed that these stories
often
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benefit the stars by giving free publicity
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them.
Even
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though
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I
also
believe that
magazine
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magazines
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should not mention things that are too embarrassing or untrue just to attract people to buy the magazine. Sensational stories
such
as these cause great unhappiness for the people concerned. In conclusion, I think
newspapers
should concentrate on real news, but
magazines
can feature some articles about
person's
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private
lives
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life
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.
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