The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
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The graph illustrates the number of participants for five activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia, between 2000 and 2020.
It is clear that
all activities increased substantially,
whereas
one activity decreased. The film clubs fluctuated between 60 and 70 from 2000 to 2020, following
that
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the martial arts from 30 to 40. The table tennis increased gradually from 15 to about 30 between 2000 and 2010. After that, it reached a peak at just over 50. The amateur dramatics grew just above 25 from 2000 to 2005.
Then
it went down significantly to approximately in 2020.
Initially
, the musical performances rose considerably from 0 to roughly 15.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participants
  • social centre
  • comparison
  • trends
  • consistently popular
  • gained popularity
  • lost popularity
  • community interest
  • availability of facilities
  • social factors
  • economic factors
  • external events
  • economic downturns
  • health crises
  • demographic changes
  • aging population
  • marketing
  • community outreach programs
  • participation rates
  • Melbourne
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