Some people government spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuse both view and give your opinion.

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with, building train and subway lines to
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reduce
traffic congestion is
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effective method that
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the traffic congestion.
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the increasing
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population
in Hong Kong. Many people are living in Hong Kong. When they go out, they
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public transport.
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spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion.
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task achievement
Expand the essay to cover both viewpoints ('building train and subway lines' vs 'building more and wider roads'). This will fulfill the requirement of discussing both views.
coherence cohesion
Include a clear introduction and conclusion to enhance the structure of your essay.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or statistics to effectively support your points. For example, mention any successful projects or studies regarding traffic reduction in other cities.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas into clear paragraphs to improve flow and readability. For instance, dedicate separate paragraphs to each viewpoint and the conclusion.
task achievement
The introduction identifies the main objective of reducing traffic congestion and one method of achieving this.
coherence cohesion
The essay begins to discuss the problem of increasing population and its effects on traffic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion relief
  • environmental sustainability
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure development
  • long-term solution
  • commute times
  • urban planning
  • traffic flow
  • efficiency and punctuality
  • investment returns
  • car usage
  • traffic management
  • community impact
  • natural habitats
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