Nowadays we are producing more and more garbage. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Nowadays producing
are
creating more Correct subject-verb agreement
is
garbage
. The causes and solutions from the government will be be
explained in the following paragraph.
Remove the redundancy
apply
Garbage
are
becoming Change the verb form
is
massive
problem Add an article
a massive
in
Change preposition
on
global
Correct article usage
a global
scales
and commoners Fix the agreement mistake
scale
didn’t
have absolute solutions to deal with Wrong verb form
don’t
this
situation. Certain governments not
have measures for reducing rubbish.
Change the verb form
do not
did not
For instance
, according to
a recent study from the Faculty of Science, at Harvard University, 70% of U.S. citizens tend to use plastic bags more than cloth bags for shopping which lead
to increasingly Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
produce
rubbish 3 times than 90’s. Wrong verb form
producing
Moreover
, One of the most
Correct word choice
biggest
problem
that happens Change to a plural noun
problems
around
any Change preposition
in
societies
is not enough Fix the agreement mistake
society
bin
for requirements in many towns which Fix the agreement mistake
bins
also
causes negative effect
later like bad Fix the agreement mistake
effects
odors
or cleanness problems
Governments should promote various ways to deal with Change the spelling
odours
this
situation and should cultivate cleanliness in society. To illustrate this
, a survey recently conducted by BBC revealed that two-thirds of people in the world willingly separate the rubbish for recycling such
Correct quantifier usage
apply
as
japan Change preposition
apply
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
their
government contains Change the word
the
garbage
separating
in their school subjects.
Replace the word
separation
Further
, Citizens should be serious with
how to reduce Change preposition
about
garbage
such
as using less
plastic items or using their own Correct quantifier usage
fewer
stuffs
Change the wording
stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
instead
.
To conclude
, despite the garbage
problem which causing
by many factors Wrong verb form
is caused
such
as not only not having good settlements but also
using plastic which tend
to increase. Governments should Correct subject-verb agreement
tends
also
promote
commoners to have knowledge for separating Verb problem
encourage
garbages
and Correct subject-verb agreement
garbage
cultivate
cleanlinessWrong verb form
cultivating
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