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The line graph and the bar chart give the information and forecast about the vehicle numbers and CO2 emission in England and Wales between 2000 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and the bar chart give the information and forecast about the vehicle numbers and CO2 emission in England and Wales between 2000 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphs above provide information about the rates of CO2 emission and
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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about
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of
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the vehicle
a vehicle
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 in 2 countries from 2000 to 2020.
Overall
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, the line chart shows both England and
Whales
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Wales
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 experienced
upward
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an upward
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 trend during
this
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 period regarding the numbers of
vehicle
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vehicles
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,starting from 20 million in 2000 and
finally
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 reaching about 60 million vehicles in use in
year
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the year
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 2020.
Moreover
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, the amount of CO2 emitted by different vehicles
such
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 as cars,buses,vans and trucks had
an
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a
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 gradual increase between 2000 and 2020. As the line bar illustrates the rate of CO2 made by cars and buses
rise
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rose
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 gradually,
whereas
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 CO2 emission by trucks witnessed
sharp
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a sharp
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 increase
during
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over
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 20 years.
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,
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apply
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 the CO2 made by vans showed
slight
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a slight
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 increase between 2000 and 2010,it showed a
steadily
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 fall from 2010 and 2020.
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, the number
off
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of
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 vehicles used by
human
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humans
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 in the period of 20 years has significantly
rise
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risen
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 and reached to
thriple
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peak
 in comparison to
year
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the year
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 2000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words co with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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