The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the given graph represents the data
over
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the number of members for a variety of activities like
film
club
, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances at Melbourne's
social centre
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in Australia from 2000 until 2020 year
overall
, the
film
club
was the most popular facility
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the
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time,
while
amateur dramatics and musical performances had the smallest amount of
participants
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the end of the graphic, the graph shows that table tennis had the highest growth over
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time, and the
film
club
had the smallest increase The
film
club
had the highest number of members in 2000 years,about 64 people, and had slightly decreased to 60 people the next decade,
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in 2010 started to slowly grow to the amount he had at the beginning. Martial arts had approximately 35 students
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the start and fluctuated with minor
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,and had about 38 students in 2020. The amateur
club
had 26
participants
in 2020
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and stayed stable for the next five years, though had
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dramatic decrease until 2020 to 5 members.
The table
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tennis had 16
participants
in 2000 and remained stable until 2010 and rapidly went up to 55 partners in 2020. The
last
activity musical performances started only in 2005 and moderately grew to 15
participants
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words film, club, participants with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • trends
  • significant increases/decreases
  • stable numbers
  • fluctuations
  • overall participation
  • comparison
  • activities
  • social centre
  • Melbourne
  • participants
  • highlight
  • report
  • graph illustrates/demonstrates
  • 20-year period
  • key features
  • main features
  • statistical data
  • variations
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