The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Average Australian household
Greenhouse gas emissions
Energy consumption
Activities
Heating
Cooling
Water heating
Appliances
Lighting
Standby
Percentage (%)
Consumption patterns
Efficiency
Emissions impact
Renewable energy
Energy-saving measures
Sustainability
Carbon footprint
Electricity
Natural gas
Emissions breakdown
Energy audit
Environmental impact
Conservation
Mitigation strategies

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