The graphs below show the size of the ozone hole over Antarctica and the production of three ozone-damaging gases from 1980 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the size of the ozone hole over Antarctica and the production of three ozone-damaging gases from 1980 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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In the image provided above, two line graphs are given. The first one gives information about the area of Ozon hole caused by Ferion gases between 1980 and 2000. The second one depicts how much of three different
distructive
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destructive
Ferion gases were produced in the same period.
To begin
with, the expansion of the damaged part of
Ozon
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layer was nearly 500 Kmm in the first year.
By
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a gradual increase, it grew to approximately 2000 Kmm in 1990;
then
it dropped to over 1000 kmm for a short period of time. After the early years of
90s
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, it worsened
moderatly
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moderately
until the middle of the decade,
then
it soared abruptly to touch a maximum
over
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3500 Km in the
last
year. Now turning our attention to the data about the
gases
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gas
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production
. The curve of
CFC-
11
production
, which was the most widespread
gas
at the
comencement
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commencement
,
experinced
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experienced
an invariant movement, levelling
of
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at 70 thousand
tons
for
the
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half of the decade;
thereafter
, it followed a constant reduction for the remaining years. In the
last
years,
CFC-
11 was the
gas
with the lowest
amont
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amount
of
production
, slightly above zero.
Although
,
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compared to
CFC-
11, the volume of
CFC-
12
production
was nearly half in 1980, it rose gradually during the
priod
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period
, surpassing
CFC-
11
production
at approximately 40
million
tons
in 1989, it kept its growing trend to end up at above 50
million
tons
.
Tha
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The
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last
gas
was N2O which
introduced
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at the
comencement
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commencement
of
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the 90s
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90s
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'90s
. Interestingly,it rose with a more positive gradient than
CFC-
12. N2O
production
exceeded
the
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CF-11
production
at almost 20
million
tons
in 1994, following a steady rise, it stopped at 40
million
tons
, the second
gas
with the
highst
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highest
volume of
production
. In conclusion, the more
gas
were
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produced, the
damage
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more damage
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of
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the ozon
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ozon
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ozone
layer was expansive.
In addition
, factories of cooler equipment were more eager to utilize
CFC-
12 and N2O rather than
CFC-
11.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words production, cfc-, gas, tons, million with synonyms.
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