The diagrams below show the stage and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the stage and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two diagrams depict the various stages of semen and concrete production with details of the required equipment.
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, both materials demand mixing machines to make an appropriate outcome, but the
cement
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requires materials to be crushed, heated and
grinded
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ground
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. Regarding
cement
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, the first level is Limestone and clay, both being crushed into
powder
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a powder
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which
then
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are
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is
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directed into a mixer, after
appropriate
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the appropriate
an appropriate
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measure
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measurements
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of
mixture
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the mixture
a mixture
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,
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the poweder
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poweder
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powder
then
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is heated inside a rotating heater.
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this
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, the final product is made after being
grinded
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ground
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and packaged into bags of
cement
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.
On the other hand
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, concrete is not solely made of
cement
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, interestingly it consists of 15%
cement
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, 10% water, 50% small stones, and 25% sand, where all of them are put together in a concrete mixer and
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mixed for an appropriate duration in order to produce
a concrete
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concrete
a block of concrete
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cement with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • crusher
  • mixer
  • rotating heater
  • grinder
  • fine powder
  • limestone
  • clay
  • cement
  • concrete
  • ratios
  • building purposes
  • small stones
  • high temperatures
  • uniform blend
  • equipment
  • process
  • stages
  • material
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