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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compasions where relevant. Wirte at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compasions where relevant. Wirte at least 150 words.
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The line graph provided above depicts how much of four various types of meat were consumed by each individual in a European country between 1976 and 2004.
To begin
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beef
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 was the meat with the highest amount of
consumption
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 at the start of the
period
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. Starting at above 200
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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, it fell slightly for two years.
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 was followed by a sudden rise, reaching a maximum of nearly 250
grams
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 in 1983. After experiencing slight fluctuations for three years, it underwent a steady decline after 1985 and ended up at almost 100
grams
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 per
person
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.
Moreover
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, the fish
consumption
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 curve demonstrated the lowest variations among the four categories. It began at over 50
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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. After decreasing slightly for two years, it
leveled
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levelled
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 off at just under 50
grams
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, maintaining
this
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 trend for the rest of the
period
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. Now turning our attention to other data, it is observable that
although
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 people consumed less chicken than
beef
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 at the start of the
period
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, chicken
consumption
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 increased steadily
thereafter
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. It surpassed lamb
consumption
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 at approximately 50
grams
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 per
person
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week
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 and
beef
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consumption
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 at 200
grams
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 by the late 1980s.
This
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 upward trend continued until the end of the
period
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 when it plateaued at over 250
grams
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, making it the most popular type of meat among people. Interestingly, lamb
consumption
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 followed a trend similar to
beef
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 but with a gradual decline from the beginning of the
period
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, ending at under 100
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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.
Overall
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, people tended to consume more chicken over time,
favoring
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 it over red meats.
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, there was minimal change in seafood
consumption
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, indicating a consistent dietary preference for fish.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words beef, consumption, period, grams, person, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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