Many people argue that restaurants should be required to disclose the nutritional information of the dishes they serve. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
In
this
day, food
calorie and nutrition become one of important
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the important
aspect
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aspects
people
considered
when they want to eat something especially when they are on a diet or they just starting to build healthy Wrong verb form
consider
habits
. This
would cause debates whether
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about whether
restaurants
should provide nutritional data
when they serve their food
or not. By showing nutritional information
, it will improve people
’s healthy eating habits
, also
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and also
encourages
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encourage
restaurants
to use
healthy ingredients
. However
, there are some drawbacks
, where getting accurate nutritional data
can be expensive and time consuming
for the Add a hyphen
time-consuming
restaurants
, and for the customers
it will feel less enjoyable eating experience. But I believe the benefits outweigh the Add a comma
customers,
drawbacks
.
One notable advantage of giving information
about nutritional
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the nutritional
data
of the dishes will help improving
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improve
the
clean and healthy eating Correct article usage
apply
habits
. For example
, when there is a transparent nutritional label provided on meals, customers tend to choose the one that contains lower calorie
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calories
This
will help people
to reduce obesity and other diets related to some ilnesses
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illnesses
such
as diabetes and heart disease. In addition
, transparent nutritional data
can encourage restaurants
to use
healthy ingredients
and cut off unhealthy ingredients
such
as excessive use
of salt, sugar, and preservatives, as well as
high content of bad fats ingredients
, so that it will lead to healthier options for the public.
Nevertheless
, there are potential drawbacks
to revealing nutritional transparency. Calculating accurate nutritional data
for each dish can be costly expensive
and needs time, Correct word choice
and expensive
this
is not very beneficial, especially for small restaurants
or restaurants
that are just starting out. They may need to hire specialists to calculate accurate information
which requires high costs for the restaurant. Furthermore
, focusing on nutritional information
can be less enjoyable for people
who eat outside. When people
go to restaurants
, they usually want to try the food
they have not tried before without worrying about calorie counts, so the nutritional data
displayed on the food
can make people
feel guilty to eat
and not be able to enjoy eating the Change preposition
about eating
food
they ordered.
In conclusion, while
the drawbacks
of displaying nutritional information
of
meals can be expensive and Change preposition
about
time consuming
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time-consuming
restaurants
, as well as
the less enjoyable experience for people
who eat outside, the advantages of improving people
’s healthier eating habits
and encouraging restaurants
to always use
healthy ingredients
for their foods can outweight
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outweigh
drawbacks
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