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The map shows the transformation of Stockford City. Summarize and make comparison when necessary.

The map shows the transformation of Stockford City. Summarize and make comparison when necessary.
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Both maps illustrate
of
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Stockford, in 1986 and at present it
was develop
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 for tourism present. In 1986, the
Farmland
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surrounded
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 by the River Stroke and there
has
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was
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 a bridge at the intersection. There
has
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is
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 a shop and post office, primary school and
farmland
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 in the north, gardens,
large
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a large
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 house and
Farmland
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 in the South. Over the period, Stockford was completely transformed. The most noticeable future
are
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 the
Farmland
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at
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in
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 the South West and North East, the shops and the gardens
demolishing
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demolished
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 by housing. The mansion is
also
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covert
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converted
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 into
pension
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a pension
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 house. And the Primary School
is expand
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. In conclusion,
the
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Stockford has changed significantly, with a noticeable addition.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words farmland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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