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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph illustrates data about the average price change of three metals based on
months
 during 2014. In general, what stands out from the graph is that there is a
corelation
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correlation
 between
price
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 change of these metals and there was a downtrend in the first five
months
. Looking at the details, as regards numbers for Nickel, the
figure
 started at 6
percent
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per cent
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 in January, but plunged in
next
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 five
months
 and reached -3
percent
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per cent
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 in June.
Next,
the
figure
 reached -1 and
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remained
fo
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for
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next
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the next
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 two
months
.
Then
, there was a rise in the number and ended the year with 1
percent
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. If we look at
numbers
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 for Copper, it can be seen that the changes were similar to
numbers
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 for Nickel
an
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the
figure
 started at 2
percent
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 in January
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and
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 went down to almost -1
percent
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 in May.
However
, the
figure
rised
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rose
rises
raised
 and reached almost 2
percent
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 in December.
By contrast
, the
figure
 for Zinc experienced growth in
first
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 month and reached 3
percent
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 in February.
Following
this
, there was a downtrend in
next
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 four
months
 and the
figure
 reached -1
percent
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.
Moreover
, the number rose in the remaining
months
 and reached 2
percent
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at the end
 of the year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words months, figure, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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