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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates data about the average price change of three metals based on
months
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 during 2014. In general, what stands out from the graph is that there is a
corelation
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correlation
 between
price
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the price
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 change of these metals and there was a downtrend in the first five
months
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. Looking at the details, as regards numbers for Nickel, the
figure
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 started at 6
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percent
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per cent
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 in January, but plunged in
next
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the next
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 five
months
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 and reached -3
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percent
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per cent
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 in June.
Next,
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the
figure
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 reached -1 and
have
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remained
fo
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for
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next
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the next
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 two
months
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.
Then
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, there was a rise in the number and ended the year with 1
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percent
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per cent
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. If we look at
numbers
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the numbers
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 for Copper, it can be seen that the changes were similar to
numbers
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the numbers
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 for Nickel
an
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apply
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the
figure
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 started at 2
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percent
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per cent
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 in January
an
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and
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 went down to almost -1
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percent
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per cent
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 in May.
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, the
figure
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rised
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raised
rose
rise
 and reached almost 2
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percent
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per cent
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 in December.
By contrast
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, the
figure
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 for Zinc experienced growth in
first
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 month and reached 3
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percent
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 in February.
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this
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, there was a downtrend in
next
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the next
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 four
months
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 and the
figure
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 reached -1
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percent
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per cent
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.
Moreover
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, the number rose in the remaining
months
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 and reached 2
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percent
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per cent
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at the end
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 of the year.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words months, figure, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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