In many countries, plastic containers have become more common than ever and are used by many food and drink companies. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In
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this
day, the
use
of
plastic
materials
in the industry has grown rapidly, especially in the meals industry.
This
has caused debates
whether
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about whether
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the
use
of
plastic
containers
will give more advantages or disadvantages. Using
plastic
containers
will lead to environmental issues
as well as
some serious
health
issues.
However
,
plastic
containers
are very practical and safe to
use
for carrying food and they have a cheaper cost than other
materials
. Despite
this
, I believe the drawbacks outweigh the benefits. One of the potential benefits of using
plastic
containers
is that it will be more practical and safe for us to
carrying
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meals.
Plastic
containers
usually have a safe cover so it will reduce the risk of spills or damage when the meals are being carried.
Furthermore
, using
plastic
containers
can help companies to maintain the production costs because
plastic
materials
is
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way more cheap than other
materials
like metal, glass, or
alumunium
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aluminium
foils. Despite the advantages, the drawbacks when using
plastic
materials
can give more concerns
especially
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, especially
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for the
environment
. As we know
that
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plastic
materials
will
be
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difficult to decompose in the
environment
,
it
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which
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will lead to
main
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major
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issues for the
environment
causing
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by the waste of
the
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plastic
,
furthermore
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furthermore,
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it
also
can be dangerous for the marine animal ecosystem.
Moreover
, the
use
of
plastic
for storing food can be dangerous for our bodies especially when the
plastic
is exposed
with
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the heat of the meal.
This
can cause some serious
health
problems
such
as cancer and other long-term
health
problems
effects. In conclusion,
while
the
beneficial
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benefit
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of using
plastic
containers
can be more practical and safe for carrying food and
also
will give
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a
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apply
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cost-effectiveness
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for
the
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companies, the drawbacks of using
plastic
containers
will
give
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cause
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a lot of dangerous
problems
especially
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, especially
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for the
environment
and can
causing
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cause
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some serious
health
problems
.
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task achievement
Include more specific examples to support your arguments. For instance, mention studies or specific instances of health issues caused by plastics or companies saving costs using plastic containers.
coherence cohesion
Try to improve the grammatical range and accuracy. For instance, pay attention to subject-verb agreement and article usage.
coherence cohesion
You provided a clear introduction that presents both sides of the argument effectively.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion nicely ties together the arguments presented, reinforcing the writer's viewpoint.
task achievement
The essay covers important points about the practicality and environmental impact of plastic containers, and appropriately addresses the prompt.

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