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task achievement
Work on providing stronger supporting evidence or examples to reinforce your main points. This will make your argument more convincing. Consider adding more balanced viewpoints to the discussion for a more comprehensive response.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between paragraphs and ideas. Make sure each idea connects well to the next, enhancing the overall coherence. Breaking down each idea clearly and providing relevant linkers can improve cohesion greatly.
task achievement
Clarify complex ideas to ensure they are easily understood by the reader. This will help in conveying your points more comprehensively. Break down ideas into simpler terms where possible.
coherence cohesion
You've made a clear attempt to structure the essay with an introduction and conclusion, which is essential for a coherent flow of ideas.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear argument with a perspective that has been maintained throughout. It shows that you can articulate a stance on a complex issue.
task achievement
You've addressed the task by discussing the idea that taxes might be unnecessary for the majority of people, outlining alternative ideas about government funding.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.