The two pie charts show the percentage of pollutants entering a particular part of ocean in 1997 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts depict the proportion of sources of pollution in some parts of the ocean.
This
includes data from 1997 to 2007.
Overall
, the highest percentage of pollutants
in 1997 was from air
which was similar to 2007. However
, in the latter year, there was also
a high proportion of domestic sewage.
In detail, in 1997, the greatest proportion of pollutants
entering a particular part of an ocean are
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were
air
at 30%. With an 8% difference, it was followed by pollution caused by marine,
and domestic sewage with more than Remove the comma
apply
half
of the pollutants
from air
at 18%. The data from industrial waste
was adjacent to the figure of
Change preposition
for
pollutants
from air
at 17%. With Add an article
the air
half
a tenth, the third least cause of ocean pollution was offshore oil, and lastly
, with
an equal fraction of 4% were from litter and farm Change preposition
apply
waste
.
After a decade, although
the rate of pollutants
from air
decreased by 1%,it was still considered the highest in 2007 along with
domestic sewage with the same result at 29%. Next was 17% from marine
industry, and offshore oil almost tripled at 14%. Add an article
the marine
Moreover
, industrial waste
nearly
reduced by Add a missing verb
was nearly
half
after 10 years at 9%, also
, farm waste
was exactly cut by half
. Finally
, in 2007, none was recorded from litter.Submitted by cng123 on
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