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The two pie charts show the percentage of pollutants entering a particular part of ocean in 1997 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts show the percentage of pollutants entering a particular part of ocean in 1997 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts depict the proportion of sources of pollution in some parts of the ocean.
This
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 includes data from 1997 to 2007.
Overall
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, the highest percentage of
pollutants
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 in 1997 was from
air
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 which was similar to 2007.
However
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, in the latter year, there was
also
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 a high proportion of domestic sewage. In detail, in 1997, the greatest proportion of
pollutants
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 entering a particular part of an ocean
are
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 from
air
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 at 30%. With an 8% difference, it was followed by pollution caused by marine
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 and domestic sewage with more than
half
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 of the
pollutants
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 from
air
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 at 18%. The data from industrial
waste
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 was adjacent to the figure
of
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pollutants
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 from
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air
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the air
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 at 17%. With
half
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 a tenth, the third least cause of ocean pollution was offshore oil, and
lastly
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,
with
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an equal fraction of 4% were from litter and farm
waste
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. After a decade,
although
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 the rate of
pollutants
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 from
air
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 decreased by 1%,it was still considered the highest in 2007
along with
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 domestic sewage with the same result at 29%. Next was 17% from
marine
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the marine
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 industry, and offshore oil almost tripled at 14%.
Moreover
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, industrial
waste
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nearly
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 reduced by
half
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 after 10 years at 9%,
also
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, farm
waste
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 was exactly cut by
half
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.
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, in 2007, none was recorded from litter.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pollutants, air, half, waste with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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